50 Songs: Captivated
So gang, I finished up my song this afternoon for the week. (my reporting over at stickk.com is actually on Thursday so this one will be reported on next week – I should have set my reporting day to be Monday, ugh).
Anyways this is somewhat of a rewrite. You see back in the day I was in a band called Blind Men See, we rocked it. We had a song called captivated that we just barely got to play right before we called it quits. I was always happy with the chorus, but the verses never did it for me.
So today in the middle of writing a totally brand new song this chorus started bouncing around in my head. I wrote a pre-chorus that leads write into it and tweaked the end of the chorus to be pseudo similar to the end of the verse.
The old song was called captivated. The new song started off being called You Are Here. What do YOU think I should call it?
The ideas for the song come from some poetry-esque stuff I had written in response to the Pure Praise study I’ve been going through.
Pardon my nasally singing, I’m sick but wanted to go ahead and get this one posted. I also added in some ideas for harmony.
Lyrics and chords (capo 4):
Fmaj7 C Em
So many times I have chosen the wide road again
Fmaj7 C Em
Still knowing that path would lead me to sin
Fmaj7 C Em D2sus(add3)
But You are waiting on the edge of heaven’s seat
Fmaj7 GsusG
Not far, but near
Em
You are here
F G Em
Eyes full of fire, I’m your desire—–Am Fmaj7 C Em
I am captivated by the burning in Your eyes
Am Fmaj7 C D2sus(add3)
I can’t escape Your love it’s like fire burning inside
Fmaj7 D2sus(add3)
Not far, but near
Am7add9
You are hereFmaj7 C Em
So many times I have turned my heart away
Fmaj7 C Em
Knowing my actions would spit in Your face
Fmaj7 C Em D2sus(add3)
Yet you’re still running to save me from me
Fmaj7 GsusG
I don’t, understand it at all
Em
You are here
F G Em
Eyes full of fire, I’m your desireAm Fmaj7 C Em
I am captivated by the burning in Your eyes
Am Fmaj7 C D2sus(add3)
I can’t escape Your love it’s like fire burning inside
Fmaj7 D2sus(add3)
Not far, but near
Am7add9
You are here
Also, there’s a few chords I’m not exactly sure how to spell out correctly. The D2sus(add3) is like a traditional C chord but slid up 2 frets. If you know the officially name let me know :)
Also, be sure to check out Mandy Thompson’s Guest Post on Songwriting. It’s really good :)
Dude!
Where’d those harmonies come from? :)
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I like the sound of that Am7add9 thingy at the end of the chorus… Floating.
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I think Captivated gives a better image of the whole song than You Are Here.
Really love the lyric, and I think you’ve done a great job linking your new song to the pre-existing one (“here’s one I prepared earlier”…lol)
‘Course, I’m hearing a full production version in my head now
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thanks for listening!
Awesome chord composition.
The progressions have a very “euro-rock” feel. It sounds similar to something Kent would do. They happen to be one of my favorite bands so, good on ya! (that was for dg4G)
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@Mark: thanks for the kind words. Your stuff is pretty amazing too.
Hey, I’m not a music guru, but I’ll tell ya this: If I heard it on the radio, I’d go home and buy it.
Good stuff bro!
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Love this song..speaks a lot of truth to my heart. Never will I be able to comprehend in this earthly body HIS desire for us, and how often I choose the wide road..very good..and I would also buy this!
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@darla: thanks so much for the encouragement. I’m not necessarily looking to sell but it’s nice to know that my stuff is connecting.
I do appreciate it!
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@Toby: Thanks my friend!!